My very first Sestina! ^_^ It wasn't as hard as it sounded though I think the sound is still a little rough, but what do you want from a first draft eh? It'll eventually get better ne? And besides, there's also a pretty strict syllable pattern in my Sestina when technically a sestina doesn't have to have any kind of syllabic pattern. I'm trying mostly for an iambic hexameter here--I have the triameter part--even right down to the last 3 lines (which all have 12 syllables--or two sets of triameters), but I think the iambic part is still a bit rusty :/ I need more practice with this iambic thing, knowing whether or not the words are truely falling unstressed stressed or if it's just my imagination heheh. This was fun. And if you hadn't caught on, this was a poem for my son, Michael whom I tend to call Miki-chan or Mikiru-chan which is a kind of Japanese nickname. I don't know if Mikiru is an actual Japanese name, but it sounds like one, and it is close to the English Michael so I use that as his little cutey-pie nickname ^_~